Comments on: Chapter 1 http://vividdescription.com/chapter-1/ (an online writing workshop) Thu, 03 Dec 2009 23:35:17 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: lgharte http://vividdescription.com/chapter-1/comment-page-1/#comment-16 lgharte Sat, 10 Oct 2009 21:24:54 +0000 http://vividdescription.com/?p=42#comment-16 Again, I really appreciate your description, especially in the opening paragraph, where you compare your emotions to riding a "carousel." One of the things I've noticed in this piece and the other is a reoccurring theme of the dark hair. It's something I wouldn't have realized to be so important, but obviously it is and seems very symbolic to being in a "a sea of strangers." Again, I really appreciate your description, especially in the opening paragraph, where you compare your emotions to riding a “carousel.”

One of the things I’ve noticed in this piece and the other is a reoccurring theme of the dark hair. It’s something I wouldn’t have realized to be so important, but obviously it is and seems very symbolic to being in a “a sea of strangers.”

]]> By: kristinabrooke http://vividdescription.com/chapter-1/comment-page-1/#comment-15 kristinabrooke Sat, 10 Oct 2009 03:15:15 +0000 http://vividdescription.com/?p=42#comment-15 I like this. Sorry it has taken so long to respond- busy week. I absolutely loved the paragraph that begins: "Yet, in spite of the relatively smooth transition from being ordinary to being adopted, ...." I absolutely related to the feeling of this to because I too am adopted- long story. Can't wait to read more. I like this. Sorry it has taken so long to respond- busy week. I absolutely loved the paragraph that begins:

“Yet, in spite of the relatively smooth transition from being ordinary to being adopted, ….”

I absolutely related to the feeling of this to because I too am adopted- long story. Can’t wait to read more.

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